【满分范文全篇仿写】
作者：保蕾 | 朗读：Elaine葉
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For teenagers aged between 15 to 18, what is the most important to the teacher?
1)the ability to help students plan for future
2)the ability to recognize which student needs help and offer that help
3)the ability to encourage students to learn on their own outside of the classroom （2015.10.30ML）
第一步，通读全文。
Secondary education can be one of the most formative experiences in a person’s life. What qualities make a good high school teacher? People might go for abilities like helping with future planning or encouraging academic autonomy. I, however, believe that the most important factor is the ability to recognize students in need and the willingness to lend a hand.
The first beneficiary is underachievers. More often than not, students who fall behind suffer from a low self-esteem. It is especially true for teenagers who find it a disgrace to lose face in front of their peers. In this case, they would stay under the radar and try to bury their problems in the dark. Nobody would even notice, not to mention offering any help. However, a teacher with a perceptive mind can discover the problem before it gets worse, so that the troubled kid could get proper help. Let’s say a boy whose parents are going through a nasty divorce may show up late at school or miss the deadline for science projects. If the teacher can spot his recent anomaly and reaches out to him, the boy might open up and confide to the teacher. This is the first step on the road to recovery and an attentive teacher makes all the difference.
Moreover, this valuable quality would rub off on students as well. Instead of lecturing them about helping others, teachers set a better example by practicing what they preach. Seeing the teacher shows compassion and kindness to a kid from disadvantaged background, children are more likely to follow suit and learn to empathize. In contrast, if the teacher is always aloof, school bullies will then pick on the troubled kid. It is because when teachers don’t even bother to care, kids would pick up a wrong message that being indifferent is the best policy. What would they turn into when reaching adulthood? Self-centered. Or even worse, mean and bitter. So it takes a sharp mind to spot trouble and a warm heart to get children out of.
Sure, it is not to say other qualities are trivial. Future career planning offers students some insight into job prospects and college majors. And students would better adjust to college life if they are trained to learn on their own outside of the classroom. But I wouldn’t say such qualities assume more power than an empathetic heart. Why? High schoolers aged 15 to 18 have very vague ideas about their interests and aspiration. That’s why people even take a gap year to figure it out. So why bother planning in such early stage of life while so much remains undiscovered and unexplored? As for the ability to encourage learning autonomy, let’s face it, children have been doing this all the time! Since the advent of Internet, children have been drawn to a variety of search engines and websites, which stimulate self-governed learning in a way no teacher can possibly compare to. But the ability to relate to troubled students and lead them out of the woods is in high demand and cannot be replaced.
To sum up, to benefit high school students to a greater extent, the teachers have to be able to recognize what’s going wrong and what can be done to make it right. Other characters can be good to have, but also fine to live without.(Bao Lei, 562w)
第二步，学习词汇和表达
1、secondary education 中等教育
（primary／tertiary education 初等／高等教育）
2、formative adj. 起到塑造型影响的
3、go for 选择
4、academic autonomy n. 学术自主
5、 in need 有需要、有难
6、lend a hand 帮忙
7、beneficiary n. 受益方
8、More often than not，时不时，总有这样的情况
9、fall behind 落后
10、 self-esteem自尊心、自信心
11、It is especially true for …尤其如此
12、lose face 丢脸
13、peers 同龄人
14、 under the radar 低调神秘
15、in the dark 深藏、隐秘
（keep sb in the dark 隐瞒某人）
16、not to mention 更不用提
17、Let’s say 比方说
18、go through 经历
19、show up 出现
20、miss the deadline 延期，不按时
21、spot v. 发现
22、anomaly n. 异常
23、reach out to sb 联系、接近某人
24、confide to 倾诉
25、the first step on the road to …路上的第一步
26、makes all the difference 与众不同
27、rub off on 感染，沾染
28、set an example 树立榜样
29、practice what they preach 言行一致
30、compassion 同情心
31、from disadvantaged background 贫困背景，背景不好
32、follow suit 效仿，跟着学
33、empathize v. 感同身受，同情
34、 In contrast, 与之相反的是
35、aloof 冷淡的，远离的
36、pick on 欺凌，欺负
37、indifferent 冷漠的
38、reach adulthood 长大
39、get out of trouble 脱离麻烦40、trivial 琐碎的，不重要的，微不足道的
41、offers sb insight into 让某人了解知道
42、job prospects 工作前景
43、adjust to 适应
44、learn on their own 自学
45、assume more power 承担更多的权量
47、vague 模糊的
48、 a gap year 间隔年
49、figure it out 想明白想清楚
50、why bother doing 何必
51、As for 至于
52、the advent of …的到来
53、be drawn to 喜爱，喜欢
54、a variety of 各种各样的
55、self-governed learning 自主学习
56、out of the woods 走出困境
57、to a greater extent 在更大程度上
58、fine to live without 没有也没事儿
第三步，尝试边读边写
______（中等教育） can be one of the most ______（有塑造型影响的） experiences in a person’s life. What qualities make a good high school teacher? People might ______（选择）abilities like helping with future planning or encouraging ______（学习自主）. I, however, believe that the most important factor is the ability to recognize students ______（有需要的） and the willingness to ______（帮助）.
The first ______（受益方） is underachievers. ______（往往）, students who ______（落后） suffer from a low ______（自信、自尊）. ______（对...尤其如此） teenagers who find it a disgrace to ______（丢脸） in front of their ______（同龄人）. In this case, they would stay ______（低调神秘）and try to bury their problems ______（隐藏在暗处）. Nobody would even notice, ______（更不用说） offering any help. However, a teacher with a perceptive mind can discover the problem before it gets worse, so that the troubled kid could get proper help. ______（比方说） a boy whose parents are ______（经历） a nasty divorce may ______（出现） late at school or ______（错过时间截止日期） for science projects. If the teacher can ______（发现） his recent ______（异常） and ______（联络、靠近） him, the boy might open up and ______（倾诉） the teacher. This is ______（通往...道路的第一步）recovery and an attentive teacher ______（与众不同）.
Moreover, this valuable quality would ______（沾染） students as well. Instead of lecturing them about helping others, teachers ______（树立更好的榜样） by ______（言行一致）. Seeing the teacher shows ______（同情心） and kindness to a kid ______（来自于贫困背景）, children are more likely to ______（效仿，跟着学） and learn to ______（感同身受）. ______（与之相反的是）, if the teacher is always ______（远离的）, school bullies will then ______（欺负） the troubled kid. It is because when teachers don’t even bother to care, kids would pick up a wrong message that being ______（冷漠的） is the best policy. What would they turn into when ______（长大）? Self-centered. Or even worse, mean and bitter. So it takes a sharp mind to spot trouble and a warm heart to ______ children ______（让某人脱离）.
Sure, it is not to say other qualities are ______（琐碎的不重要的）. Future career planning offers students some _____(让某人知道了解) ______（工作前景）and college majors. And students would better _____(适应) college life if they are trained to _____(自学) outside of the classroom. But I wouldn’t say such qualities _____(承担更多权量) than an empathetic heart. Why? High schoolers aged 15 to 18 have very _____(模糊的) ideas about their interests and aspiration. That’s why people even take _____(间隔年) to _____(想明白). So _____(何必)planning in such early stage of life while so much remains undiscovered and unexplored? _____(至于) the ability to encourage learning autonomy, let’s face it, children have been doing this all the time! Since _____(...的到来) Internet, children have _____(喜爱) _____(各种各样的) search engines and websites, which stimulate _____(自主学习) in a way no teacher can possibly compare to. But the ability to relate to troubled students and lead them _____(走出困境) is in high demand and cannot be replaced.
To sum up, to benefit high school students _____(在更大程度上), the teachers have to be able to recognize what’s going wrong and what can be done to make it right. Other characters can be good to have, but also _____(没有也不要紧).(Bao Lei, 562w)
第四步，拿出电脑，打字仿写。
中等教育在一个人的生命中是最具塑造性的经历之一。什么特质能成为一个好的高中教师呢？人们可能会选择诸如帮助策划未来或者鼓励自主学习这样的能力。但是我相信最重要的因素是能识别需要帮助的学生并且有帮助他们的意愿。
第一个受益方就是后进生。经常，落后的学生自信心都比较弱，尤其是觉得在同龄人面前丢脸是一大耻辱的青少年。这样的话，他们就会行事低调，可以把自己的问题深藏。没有人会意识到，更不用说提供帮助了。但是，有一颗灵敏发现力的老师能在事情变糟前发现问题，所以这个孩子就能得到该有的帮助。比方说一个男孩父母正在经历一场离异，他可能会迟到或者科学实验作业延期不交。如果老师能发现他最近的异常并且去找他沟通的话，男孩说不定能敞开心扉和老师倾诉。这就是修复的路上第一步，一位有心的老师才能创造不同。
还有，这个重要的品质也会传染给孩子。不用说教的方式告诉孩子帮助他人的重要，父母通过言行一致能设立一个更好的榜样。看到老师在对待一个来自贫困家境的孩子时显示出同情和善意孩子就更可能效仿，而且学会去感同身受。与之相反的事，如果老师总是远离，学校的恶霸酒会欺负有问题的孩子。这是因为当老师都懒得去管的时候，孩子就会接受一个错误的讯号就是冷漠是上策。当他们长大后会变成什么样？自我为中心。甚至更糟，尖酸刻薄。所以需要一颗睿智的心灵才能识别麻烦而且还要一颗温暖的心才能帮孩子脱离麻烦。
当然，这也不是说其他品质就不重要了。未来职业的规划能帮助学生了解工作前景和大学里的专业。如果学生被训练在课外自己学习他们就更容易适应大学生活。但是我不会说这些品质就比一颗善解人意的心具有更大力量。为什么？15到18岁的高中生对于自己兴趣和志向人是很模糊。这就是为什么人们甚至需要花一个间隔年才能把这些搞明白。所以当还有那么多等待开发和探索何必这么早就计划呢？至于鼓励自主学习的能力，其实吧，孩子一直都在这么做啊！自从因特网到来，孩子就一直喜欢各种各样的搜索引擎和网站，这些都激励自主学习以一种老师不可能像对比的方式。但是能与有问题的学生相处的好并且带他们走出困境这种能力是被需要的而且是不能被取代的。
总结一下，为了更多的让高中生受益，老师应该能识别有什么问题以及做什么能使它变好。其他的性格能有也好，但是没有也无大碍。
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